My Halo fan-fic: The rising storm.

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  •  11-19-2007, 6:10 AM 120413

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    My Halo fan-fic: The rising storm.

    Hi I've had this idea for a while so tell me what ya think.

     

                                                                     Chapter 1

    2552

    Thompson estate-New Mombassa

    The bright sun beat down on the his surroundings. He crawled through the underbrush, twigs and low branches scrathed against his skin, but he kept going he then saw his target, a small island of brown, poorly hidden in a small bush 10 meters in from of him. He pulled his weapon close, aimed and fired, the shots flew and landed straight into the bush.

    A loud 'OWWW!' was heard and a small black boy emerged, the small paintball marks on his head. He was 7, quite tall, but very skinny, he had a calm and friendly demeanor and came towards him and lent out a hand, and a equalily small hand took it. The second boy was white, but years of the scorching african sun had given him a brown tint, like he had been partially burned. He had short brown hair, had a light build and was shorter than the black boy.

    This was Kyle Thompson, son of the famous Captian Jack Thompson, who's ship The Heart of Gold had fought many battles in the war with the covenant. Kyle simled at the black boy and said ' I got you there didn't I Shen?' The boy replied 'Well that wasn't fair you caught me of guard, next time fight fair!'

    Shen was also the son of a navy officer, his father served with Kyle's on the Heart of Gold and when they were first introduced as toddlers they had formed a strong friendship. Kyle looked at the sky, knowing his father was up there, part of the fleet above earth, so he didn't feel worried. With his dad up there not even the covenant could get him.

    A 30 year old woman, with fair blonde hair came out and called' Kyle? Shen? You out here? Kyle, your father's here.'

    Kyle rushed to the woman with Shen close behind. Kyle then asked 'Really? He's here, your not kidding are you Mom?'

    She laughed and beemed down at him 'No Kyle, he's here and he's be looking forward to seeing you so don't keep him waiting. Shen, you can wait outhere, Kyle will be out in a few minutes'

    Shen said ' OK, See you in a minute Kyle' And then sat on a chair and twiddled with his thumbs.

    Kyle then rushed inside and ran straight into a tall man in navy uniform.

    'Hi dad'

    'Hi Son long time no see.'

     

    End of Chapter 1


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  •  11-19-2007, 7:20 AM 120420 in reply to 120413

    Re: My Halo fan-fic: The rising storm.

    Wow that was pretty good.
  •  11-19-2007, 8:03 AM 120422 in reply to 120420

    Re: My Halo fan-fic: The rising storm.

    welll, bring out chapter 2!
    Urr a towel...
  •  11-19-2007, 1:35 PM 120489 in reply to 120422

    Re: My Halo fan-fic: The rising storm.

    i also wrote a halo story short(although longer than this) but good

    well done

  •  11-19-2007, 3:28 PM 120522 in reply to 120413

    Re: My Halo fan-fic: The rising storm.

    Jack Thompson... lol.
    my gamertag's my name, so add meh!
  •  11-19-2007, 4:41 PM 120525 in reply to 120522

    Re: My Halo fan-fic: The rising storm.

    very nice, a bit short, and a clipped but overall i give it maybe 3 1/2 stars or 4

    You need to describe things more vididly

    let me restate, not need, but it would be nicer! 


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  •  11-20-2007, 5:54 AM 120715 in reply to 120525

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    Re: My Halo fan-fic: The rising storm.

    Adversus Compello:

    very nice, a bit short, and a clipped but overall i give it maybe 3 1/2 stars or 4

    You need to describe things more vididly

    let me restate, not need, but it would be nicer! 

    My apolgies for it being short, I was kinda pressed for time, I will make sure to add that little detail when I can.

    Chapter 2 Soon!!!!!


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  •  11-20-2007, 6:31 AM 120718 in reply to 120715

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    Re: My Halo fan-fic: The rising storm.

    Sorry stupid computer, chapter 2 below!!!!


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  •  11-20-2007, 6:31 AM 120719 in reply to 120715

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    Re: My Halo fan-fic: The rising storm.

    Here it is Chapter 2!!!!

     

                                                              Chapter 2

    October 2553

    UNSC Orbital defence platform Cario orbiting earth

    The war was over.

    This is what the man kept telling himself as he stood out and looked at the blue orb below, shimmering in the sunlight.

    Earth was safe. The covenant was gone and the flood, well the flood were stopped.

    He took off his cap and wiped his sweaty, wrinkled head, a slight ping as he touched the neural interface at the base of his skull.

    A young man approach in dress uniform, carrying a steam mug of coffee and handed it to him.

    'Thank you lieutenant'

    'No problem Lord Hood sir' as he stood to attention, saluted and return to at ease.

    Lord Hood drank the coffee, the stale taste of the coffee beans which had been in storage the last year, tasted as bad most coffee he'd had the last six months. And what an eventful six months....

    The lieutenant still stood at attention staring at his superior, waiting for him to finish his coffee. 'Is there something else son?'

    'Yes sir there a Dr Chandra Singh who wants to see you, he said it was urgent.'

    'No doubt, send him in lieutenant.' Hood grinned to himself. Dr Singh was one of the UNSC's most respected research scientist, almost as Dr Halesly.

    At this point he came in, wearing the typical lab coat, which was stained with god knows chemicals. His hair was unkempt and it look like he'd been up most of the night, the dark rings around his eyes, were even darker than his brown skin. He saluted Hood and then said

    'Good morning Admiral'

    'Likewise Doctor, my lieutenant said you had something urgent to tell me, and you weren't one to mince words, what is it?'

    'Well that is true, but I get down to the bottom line: I want to start another Spartan program'

    'Need I remind you that we don't have the resources to fund this right now, we just finished a terrible war, a war that pushed humanity to the brink of extinction, we barely have enough resources to keep this station operational, so how do you expect us to be able to afford another project?'

    Dr Singh hesitated, thought for a second and replied, 'Sir, that is exactly why we need them, humanity is weak, and even when we regain our strength, there is a big wide galaxy out there, and we might run in to more aliens, more unfriendly species, which will make the covenant look like pushovers, we need elite protectors to guarantee the survival of our race!'

    'Enough! I will think about your proposal and summon you when I have made my decision.'

    Dr Singh, angrily stormed out, almost knocking a wayward officer of the deck. Hood watched him storm out the door and thought. Do we need more Spartans? Was it worth the cost?

    Humanity was just recovering, by the end of the year the UNSC would return control to the Earth government and they would have to do there bidding. But on the other hand, he thought of those brave defenders who gave the life to turn the tide of the war, Johnson, Keyes, John. He stopped at this point and thought of John-117 the Master Chief, and how much that one Spartan had influenced the outcome of the war, how his sacrifice saved humanity.

    So difficult, so difficult, but he knew what his decision was, even before Singh had entered the bridge.

    He'd tell him his decision tomorrow.

     

    End of Chapter 2

     


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  •  11-20-2007, 6:35 AM 120720 in reply to 120719

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    Double post. I dont think I had the whole story though.
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  •  11-20-2007, 6:55 AM 120723 in reply to 120720

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    Re: My Halo fan-fic: The rising storm.

    Yeah, stupid computer, Its all up there now, just look above your post.


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  •  11-20-2007, 7:12 AM 120725 in reply to 120723

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    you might not wanna mention the name "jack thompson" on a videogame forum... 

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  •  11-20-2007, 8:04 AM 120726 in reply to 120725

    Re: My Halo fan-fic: The rising storm.

    Pretty good, I saw some spelling mistakes though.
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  •  11-20-2007, 10:19 AM 120758 in reply to 120725

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    Re: My Halo fan-fic: The rising storm.

    toasterking93:
    you might not wanna mention the name "jack thompson" on a videogame forum... 

    True, but I was trying to be ironic, but if you want me to change it fine, he will be renamed in chapter 3.

    And yes there were mistakes, but most have been taken care off.

    And other comments?

    Chapter 3 Tommorrow!


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  •  11-21-2007, 7:21 AM 121311 in reply to 120758

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    Re: My Halo fan-fic: The rising storm.

    Here's Chapter 3!

                            

                                                       Chapter 3

    September 2552 

    Anderton Estate-New Mombassa

    The dazzling sunlight crept in the bedroom, and quickly roused the small boy in it. Kyle squinted and looked outside, another beautiful day.

    His father had left late last night after talking with mother. He had heard some of the conversation, but he didn’t understand what they were saying but he had seen his father's expression. He was worried, and Jack Anderton rarely got worried. He tried to shake it from his mind and decided to think out what he was doing today: tutoring in the morning, then he would over the Shen's house to play, and this thought pleased him.

    A call came from the stairs 'Kyle come down and have breakfast'. He quickly got dressed then ran down the stairs and into the kitchen. It was large like most of the rooms in the estate, with creamy-white walls and completely tiles, with black granite surfaces.

    His mother was there with two plates: One with cereal and the other with some buttered toast. She handed him the cereal and they both sat down at one of the work surface and looked up at the sky.

    His mother then calmly said 'Odysseus are you online?'

    A shimmer on a small circular terminal and a holographic man appeared. He was tall wearing a toga and strong features. He then replied 'Yes, what is it you require ma'am' He was they called a 'Dumb AI' and was one of the many perks of his father's profession.

    'Can you tell me the temperature outside and the predicted forecast?'

    'Retrieving...40 degrees Celsius, with a forecast of clear sky and low humidity. Anything else ma'am?'

    'Yes, prepare for teaching activities and when you are ready go to the study.'

    'Of course'. He vanished as he went to complete his allotted tasks, his mother turned to Kyle, and said ' Make sure you listen to Odysseus, you are very lucky boy to have and AI teaching you.

    'I know.' He said, the taste of the cereal still in his mouth.

    'And make sure you have fun and learn something new'.

    'I will, see you later mom.' Kyle then entered the lobby and the automated wooden doors silently closed behind him.

    Odysseus grinned a wide smile at Kyle then said 'Good morning Kyle, shall we begin?'

    'Ok.' As he sat down at the mahogany desk, a holographic image formed around the board on the far side of the study and depicted a large city, full of people in togas, and going about there life.

    ''Today we are going to learn about the Roman Empire'

    'Is that why you look like that are you a Roman fable? Kyle asked curiously.

    'No, Odysseus was a Greek hero who travelled the seas and had many adventures, now lets begin the lesson.

    Then next few hours were fascinating, as Odysseus explained how this ancient culture, using tactics and strategy, conquered most of Europe and brought so much to their culture. After the lesson was done, he left the study and started getting ready to go to Shen's but then his mother rushed into his room.

    He had never seen her this worried, she was pale, almost white and her usual cheery demeanour was replaced by a terrified look.

    'What is it mom?'

    'We need to leave now, pack some clothes and some food and met me at the car honey'

    'Why? What's happening?'

    'The covenant, they're here they are attacking Earth.'

     

    End of Chapter 3


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